Wednesday, March 28, 2018
Interview with Will Viharo
Hi folks,
Just completed this interview with Will Viharo on his column, Digital Media Ghost. Click here to see it on the site.
Author of the Week: Les Edgerton
Fiction is easier to categorize than fiction
writers, at least much of the time.
Take award-winning, bestselling, universally
lauded “crime writer” Les Edgerton. Designating him as such may be
promotionally correct, but it doesn’t begin to distill the essence of a man
that had led a long, complex, tormented, challenging, and ultimately rewarding
life.
To pigeonhole Les Edgerton merely as a “crime
writer,” even though he writes “crime fiction,” would indeed be a crime, or at
least a misdemeanor, of intellectual laziness.
An author may specialize in writing violent,
hardboiled tales of desperate people doing risky things, but that doesn’t mean
the author is anything like his or her characters. Most of the time the writers
are sharing their own fantasies. The readers themselves take a vicarious walk
on the dark side with no danger to themselves. Kind of like a video game.
Except reading requires a certain kind of mental concentration that is eluding
more and more of us as our multi-media both expands and contracts. I’ve never
played a single video game in my life, but I understand the emancipating
escapism of creative imagination, especially my own.
For the record, though many of my books can be
categorized as some version of “noir,” I’ve never considered myself a crime
writer per se. I write mostly from my own experiences, and since I’m not a
criminal, at least in the legal sense, I don’t really relate to criminals. My
protagonists are often damaged people who read too many crime novels and watch
too many crime movies, and then try to act accordingly. And therein lies the
conflict of the otherwise unconventional narratives.
But don’t call me a “crime writer.” Unless, of
course, you consider my work an affront to society at large. The only rules I
break are literary in nature.
Enough about me. Let’s focus on the subject of
this interview, which is not the interviewee.
Les Edgerton is a legend. Maybe not in his mind,
but in mine and many, many others, whether readers or writers. He comes by this
honor not through any intentional ambitions, but incidentally, just by living
his life, often taking the hard road instead of cruising down Easy Street. Not
that there was often an optional fork in his path, anyway.
Though I’m a “straight,” at least as far as the
law goes, I relate a lot to Les both as a person and as a writer, though our
backgrounds are quite different. Besides artistic sublimation, we are bonded by
a tenacious survival instinct, and a low tolerance for baloney. (In my case, I
eschew both the behavioral and the edible iterations).
Les has plenty to say on these and other
subjects, so I’ll let him take it from here. Hang on tight: it’s going to be a
bumpy, grumpy, but edifying ride…
You’ve sold everything from drugs to life
insurance in your colorful life. How do you sell yourself as an author in such
a crowded, competitive marketplace?
I don’t think I’m a good one to ask this of! I
don’t seem to do that great a job in selling myself. I suspect it’s because social
media is fairly foreign to me and I’ve always felt out of place in it. People
who pat themselves on the back or seek out praise seem a bit… what’s the un-PC
word I’m looking for? Oh, yeah, kind of girlie. Most of it reminds me of “those
kids” in high school, running for class president. Working the room pretty much
like a… what’s the word I’m looking for?... oh, yeah, like a whore. That’s kind
of what social media looks like to me and I’m just uncomfortable in it. And
yet, I put more of myself out there than I can ever feel comfortable with. I
just have a deep-seated belief that real men and women don’t wear their
feelings on their sleeves and that seems to be a main staple of social media.
So, in what will probably be an unpopular answer to your question, I’m probably
not suited very well to social media so I doubt if I’ll ever do well with it
for promotion. Plus, I think it’s maybe a bit overrated—I don’t think it moves
that many books. What moves significant numbers of books is being published by
a Legacy 5 or a top independent, getting reviews in mainstream papers and
mostly by being on the shelves of brick and mortar bookstores. Social media
seems to sell to a very small audience, composed of authors in the same genre
and their relatively few fans. Compared to the effort expended, I don’t see a
commensurate return in sales. I suspect many of us have bought into that advice
that we need a “platform” if we want to sell books. And, crank out more and
more books, regardless of the quality.
Just not interested in getting votes for Prom
King…
You’re been in the military and in prison, so
unlike many of your peers in the noir field, you know real violence up close
and personal. How does this background inform your work as a crime fiction
writer?
As an honest and knowledgeable writer. I see all these writers writing
criminals and it’s obvious most don’t have the faintest clue how the criminal
mind works or how real criminals actually act. It works the same as the
straight’s mind, to be honest. Like a straight, they don’t think in terms of
good and evil or good and bad. Whatevever they do, it’s usually for the same
reasons a straight does things. (I know that the term “straight” today
sometimes means a heterosexual, but I use it the way guys in the joint use it—to
describe a person who obeys the law, i.e., a “lame.”)
The way most bad guys keep getting portrayed is pretty much the way
MSNBC portrays criminals in their inside the joint series. Mainly, they show
two-three kinds of criminals—the psychotic and the weight-lifters. The gangs.
None of those guys are the norm—they’re just the guys they can sensationalize.
Most are the outliers, but they’re presented as the average guy. If you could
watch an average prison scene, you’d probably focus on the guys bench-pressing
Buicks. Those aren’t the bad guys. Half of them are on steroids and half of
them couldn’t or wouldn’t fight their way out of a paper bag. It’s mostly all
for looks and show and doesn’t scare anyone. They’re selling wolf tickets and
the only people who buy those are lames. Or, the gang-bangers. They walk around
like they’re breaking bad all the time and the truth is a lot of them are
jokes. Or, out and out cowards. They only break bad when they outnumber others.
The quiet guy on the corner of the yard, talking with one or two guys is the
true badass in the joint. The weightlifters don’t bother him, the gangsters don’t
bother him. They walk around this guy and ignore him. That’s because he’s the
guy who will take them out in a New York second and they know it. But most
writers don’t even know this guy exists. He doesn’t fit their stereotypical
ideas of what a convict is or what a truly bad ass looks or acts like.
There are so many books now about meth criminals
or guys who are high or drunk and are basically just mesomorphs. Yeah, there
are guys like that—more now than ever before—but there are also a substantial
number of people involved in criminal activities who don’t look anything like
these guys and act nothing like them. A great many criminals never get caught.
Look up crime statistics and it’s an eye-opener. Personally, when I finally got
caught I’d committed well over four hundred burglaries and many other crimes
for which I never got charged. I actually got caught for two crimes. Two. They
charged me with 82 burglaries and they didn’t have a clue about any of them
other than the two they caught me in the act of. Now, any endeavor you get
caught doing two out of over four hundred, you’d kind of have to admit was
successful. The only way I got charged with more than those two was that I was
with other guys who also got caught and they snitched me out, telling about the
jobs they’d been in on with me. The cops got lucky and actually caught me in
two actual crimes out of the more than four hundred I got away with. If cops
didn’t depend on snitches they’d never catch anyone. For crimes against
property that is. For some crimes—like murders and kidnappings—they have a
better rate. Although, more than half of all murders go unsolved, so…
I didn’t quit committing crimes when I got out of
prison—I just quit getting caught. And that was because I acted alone. I also
didn’t drink or do drugs on “the job.”That’s all it takes to be a successful
outlaw. I committed over a thousand new crimes after being released and the
cops didn’t even sniff what I was doing. I remember times when I left my parole
officer’s office and went out and robbed a place. It’s really easy to be a
successful criminal. There are so many outlaws who commit crimes constantly and
never come close to getting caught. But, straights keep on believing this
bullshit that crime doesn’t pay and eventually all criminals get caught. That’s
about as true as saying all gamblers eventually end up losing. Yeah…
The other thing lacking in many writer’s work is
a sense that they have a clue at all about killing or facing death. Everyone
fancies themselves an expert these days and few are. In Hemingway’s day the
writers who had never faced death left that stuff to Papa—most would have been
embarrassed to portray violent death in their pages—Hemingway might have called
them out on it. So they wrote about things like garden parties and had
characters named Gatsby. At which they did fine. When they wrote about things
they actually knew something about and had some actual talent, they looked like
real writers. Today, those kinds of writers are not afraid of being called out
and they pretend to know something about facing death and while a few do, a lot
don’t. They’ve never been in the service, or a criminal, or a cop or anyone who’s
faced dying on an up-close-and-personal level. Sorry, but I can’t suspend my
disbelief for a lot of them. They give away their innocence in so many ways. A
lot of them should be focusing on garden parties more, the life of insurance salesmen,
and sorrowing over the lost babes of their youth…
At some point in your life, in between being a
hair stylist, business headhunter, sports writer, and escort service
specialist, you were actually homeless, and then you earned a MFA in writing. Do
you feel your diverse personal and professional experiences or your formal
education are more crucial to your literary success, or are they complementary?
Is it different for everyone?
I was homeless more than once, Will. Several
times—in New Orleans, in Baltimore, in Orange County. No big deal. Our homeless
are far wealthier than the poor of most countries. I never had to miss many
meals. Too many bleeding hearts out there for that to happen. And, even if
there weren’t, our Dumpsters hold better and more food than most of the
shitholes in the world do for their regular citizens. Except maybe the
Dumpsters in L.A.—that’s one shithole where it looks like the homeless have
completely taken over…
As to your question, formal writing instruction
never gave me an ounce of help in writing. Just a colossal waste of money and
time. And, I went to one of the best schools in the country—Vermont College,
which places in the top five every year in Poets & Writers. I
shudder to think what these Johnny-come-lately programs that have sprung up
everywhere are like. They’re just cash cows for colleges. The only one I see as
being of value any more is Seton Hill. Not even Iowa any more. The vast number
of writers are being taught to be one-trick ponies. They just keep writing the
same tired-ass story over and over. Show me the difference between Jack Reacher
novel #1 and Jack Reacher novel #18. Not ten words worth of difference. And I
read and enjoy Reacher novel, and admire Lee Child who doesn’t pretend to be a
writer but is an author. Big difference.
I just went through a near-death experience and
my entire outlook on life has shifted. I know now what guys like Richard
Brautigan felt like. Like we’ve put our entire lives out there and no one
noticed, except superfically. Well, screw that.
The real reason I think you asked about MFAs and
the like is that you understand that the vast majority of wannabe writers have
(rightfully) little faith in their writing ability and are looking for a magic
bean that will confer the title of writer upon them. This is the kind of thing
they’ve looked for all their lives. Go to school, earn an MBA, make a fortune
on Wall Street or in the corporate world. Get a law degree, go to med school,
get a teaching degree, a degree in journalism, etc., etc. It’s all about
education, about a degree. Biggest load of bullshit ever sold to gullible
youth. And, the only route to success they’re aware of. It’s fool’s gold but
they don’t know it. They don’t realize the adults in their lives have been sold
a crock of shit and all they can do is move it along to the next generation.
Kids, listen to the truly wise among us. Listen
to the genius, Flannery O’Connor, who when asked if MFA programs discouraged
writers, replied, “Not enough of them.” Truer words were never spoken… A
semester studying just one of her stories (preferably without some idiot MFA
advisor whispering in their ear their own moronic interpretation of it) will
learn infinitely more about writing than sitting through a hundred academic
lectures and make-work workshops. Run like the wind from MFA programs if you
ever want a chance to learn to write. Where it will help you is to get
published in journals run by MFA folks, mostly an experience that feels oddly
like incest, probably because it is. It will also get your work read by a
certain kind of literary agent who still puts value in these kinds of worthless
degrees. They’ll help you become an author. Not a writer. But, I suspect the
majority of folks writing today would rather be an author than a writer. At
least, a lot of the work I see reflects that mindset.
Will, to fully answer your question, for me
neither my life experiences nor any formal education were crucial to my
literary ability. To my literary success, my life experiences—particularly
the ones outside the norm---were helpful, but as far as literary ability only
two things really helped that. First, an extraordinary intelligence (an I.Q. of
163), and second, having read far, far more than anyone I know was the biggest
single factor. I firmly believe that you learn to write by reading. And, it’s
what I notice about a lot of today’s writers—they don’t seem to have read much
of quality. I began by reading Balzac and de Maupassant and the Russians when I
was six and seven and eight years old. I see so many writers who say they began
reading the Hardy Boys and cannot believe they’ll ever amount to a whole lot in
letters. Is that elitist? Sure, but to be a good or great writer is the very
definition of elitism. Can you imagine Saul Bellow attending some of today’s
writer’s conventions or even being aware of them? Hemingway might show up but
only because he had a commercial side and figured out people would buy him
drinks. I’m pretty sure Flannery O’Connor wouldn’t even consider something like
that. She valued her brain cells more than that… Too much class and pride to
work the room like a high school kid trying to get enough votes for class
president or prom king.
Reading voraciously and reading a quality list
from the age of five or six is the key to becoming anything more than a
formulaic or hack writer. Being also a genius doesn’t hurt. I get students who
read an average of 5-10 books a year and I know they’re never going to write
anything I’d want to read. Their literary heroes are John Gresham, Stephen King
and the like. It used to be that anyone who read those kinds of authors would
never admit it in public but those days have changed… It says a lot when a “writer”
claims that one of his writing heroes is Stephen King. You can pretty well bet
this isn’t a writer who can tell the difference between an Ian Fleming novel
and The Stranger although he probably would never read the latter.
What are your influences, literary or otherwise?
I’ll list those who’ve written stories I admire
and those I’ve learned something from. I always hate doing this as I can’t
begin to list them all and after the interview comes out I feel badly about
forgetting someone who should be on the list. Please forgive me the omissions.
Here ya go. The Bible. Harry Crews, Camus,
Borges, Steve Hamilton, Joe Lansdale, Anthony Smith, Paul Brazill, Ray Banks,
David Sedaris, Dennis Lehane, Elmore Leonard, Raymond Carver, Ken Bruen,
Christopher Moore, Flannery O’Connor, James Dickey, Faulkner, Nelson Algren,
Charles Bukowski, Elaine Ash, Kurt Vonnegut, Jim Murray, Larry Brown, Helen
FitzGerald, Barry Hannah, Les Edgerton—yeah, myself—I read my own work
often--Celine, Mark Twain, Guillermo O’Joyce, Sherman Alexie, Richard
Brautigan, Callie Khouri, Janet Burroway, Linwood Barclay, David Mamet, Cormac
McCarthy, Anton Chekhov, Saul Bellow, Pete Dexter, Larry Watson--a lot more I’m
forgetting right now. You’ll notice most are older or dead and that’s because I
don’t see a lot of competition for great writing these days. I see a lot of
work you might call “satisfactory” but little that is actual genius. It’s like
a sea of mediocre TV series’ episodes that look a lot alike out there. Name ten
books that actually affected you emotionally in the last couple of years. Name
five. Hell, name one or two! Name one person writing today who could write a
book to match one of Nelson Algren’s. There are a handful but a small handful.
Sorry about the bitterness. I nearly died a few
weeks ago and it kind of changed my outlook on life and writing. I’ve come
close to death before but prior to this was young enough I didn’t really
believe I could die. Now I know it’s always very close. And it made me want to
never again lie for the sake of being liked. I’d much rather be respected and
even hated for being forthright and honest than for making somebody feel good.
Write a truly great book like The Lock Artist,
Trout Fishing in America, The Stranger, A Feast of Snakes, The Rapist, No
Country for Old Men, or a short story as brilliant as “A Good Man Is Hard to
Find” or “The Fiend” and then you’ll be a writer and not just an author.
What’s next for you?
Well, since I’ve just committed professional
suicide with this interview, about all that’s left is to get my affairs in
order, then lay down in the casket and cross my hands and await the
pallbearers.
In the meantime, I’ll be finalizing my memoir, Adrenaline
Junkie, which comes out this fall from Down&Out Books. Maybe it’ll win
one of those awards some of my other books should have won. Probably not… Finishing
up a novel based on a short story I wrote when I was 12 and that my agent urged
me to write, saying it “haunted her” and that if I wrote it well, could be as
good as No Country for Old Men.
At any rate, thank you for this opportunity,
Will. Hope the haters won’t include you—you just were the gracious host who
asked the questions and didn’t realize he was talking to the angry old bastard
threatening the kids on his lawn with his .12 gauge…
And, I don’t really hate many of my fellow
writers. I just don’t want to have drinks with some of you… and I’m sure the
feeling’s mutual. That’s what we call a “big hairy-ass deal”… not… Too many “nice”
guys (to one’s face) out there who I wouldn’t turn my back on for a nanosecond.
I love the real men and women of literature. I detest the phonies that work the
room and can’t do the real work of writing. As we say in Texas, too many
writers today are “all hat and no cattle.”
Blue skies,
Les
I prefer gray, but…wow. Thanks for one helluva
ride.
@HookedOnNoir
FB – Les
Edgerton, Author
BIO: Les Edgerton is an ex-con, matriculating at Pendleton Reformatory in
the sixties for burglary (plea-bargained down from multiple counts of burglary,
armed robbery, strong-armed robbery and possession with intent). He was an
outlaw for many years and was involved in shootouts, knifings, robberies,
high-speed car chases, dealt and used drugs, was a pimp, worked for an escort service,
starred in porn movies, was a gambler, served four years in the Navy, and had
other misadventures. He’s since taken a vow of poverty (became a writer) with
21 books in print. His memoir, Adrenaline Junkie is currently being
edited prior to being published by Down&Out Books in November, 2018. Work
of his has been nominated for or won: the Pushcart Prize, O. Henry Award, Edgar
Allan Poe Award (short story category), Derringer Award, PEN/Faulkner Award,
Jesse Jones Book Award, Spinetingler Magazine Award for Best Novel (Legends
category), awarded two literary grants from the NEA, and the Violet Crown Book
Award, among others. Screenplays of his have placed as a semifinalist in the
Nicholl’s and as a finalist in the Best of Austin and Writer’s Guild’s competitions.
He holds a B.A. from I.U. and the MFA in Writing from Vermont College.
He was the writer-in-residence for three years at the University of Toledo, for
one year at Trine University, and taught writing classes for UCLA, St. Francis
University, Phoenix College, Writer’s Digest, Vermont College, the New York
Writer’s Workshop and other places. He currently teaches a private
novel-writing class online. He lives in Ft. Wayne, Indiana, where he immigrated
to some years ago from the U.S. and is currently learning the language and
customs there. He writes because he hates... a lot... and hard. Injustice and
bullying and mendacity are what he hates the most. He can be found at www.lesedgertononwriting.blogspot.com/
Saturday, March 17, 2018
Book Recommendation
Hi folks,
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I want to draw your attention to a terrific novel that will be on sale this coming Tuesday, March 20 for only $1.99 for one day. Consider getting a copy of Marjorie Brody's psychological thriller, TWISTED. It's one of my all-time favorite thrillers and is just such an intelligent and riveting read that it's found a place in my personal top ten novels.
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Blue skies,
Les
Friday, February 23, 2018
FLU
Hi folks,
Sorry I’ve been absent the past couple of
weeks, but I’ve had the flu and then had a relapse. I don’t know if I was near
death but it sure felt like it. I seem to have pulled through and that was totally
due to my beautiful wife Mary who was the best nurse I’ve ever had.
It all began with a
surprise birthday party Mary sprung on me two days before my actual birthday on
February 11 at a local Mexican restaurant we like. Somehow she kept the whole
thing secret from me and I was knocked out when we walked in and there were
dozens of my friends and relatives. I’ve never had a surprise party before, and
at age 75 was running out of opportunities. She really created a magical time
for me, one I’ll never forget.
But, literally the moment
we went back home, the misery began. Almost the instant we walked in the door
we were both knocked to our knees. There was no doubt what we had. It hit so
hard, I had to cancel our online class and as it was only our second week that
took some doing. It ended up I had to cancel a second week and I’ve never had
to do that.
We went to the doctor and
were quickly diagnosed and put on Tamiflu It worked for Mary—although she went
back to work a couple of days too early, but that’s Mary. I just got worse and
worse. It was all I could do to get out of bed a few times a day to go to the
bathroom and that trip was just debilitating. We took me back to the doctor and
he put me on a bunch of other medicines and COPD measures. I truly thought I
was going to die. Truth be told, I wanted
to die. If this was going to be the way the rest of my life would be, I didn’t
want anything to do with it. I couldn’t breathe—it felt like I was continually
suffocating; I couldn’t sleep—it was just a constant barrage of
coughing,coughing, coughing all night long. The worse was I couldn’t think. A
couple of times I went to my computer and tried to focus on a student’s work
and just couldn’t make myself read it intelligently.
But, I’ve recovered. Should
be able to return to class on Monday.
A couple of things took
place while I was will that I wasn’t able to report on then. A blogpost I’d
previously been asked to contribute was printed and here it is. Hope you enjoy
it. And then, I’d recorded a radio podcast with Dr. Paul Reeves out of Detroit.
The broadcast comes out shortly and links are below.
Blue skies,
Les
FEBRUARY 14TH, 2018
Using Third Person vs First Person Novel Narratives
By Guest
Blogger
Hi folks,
A source of discussion that always comes up at the beginning of my
classes is whether the writer should use first- or third-person. The short
answer I usually give, is: “Whatever the material calls for.”
Since that doesn’t adequately address the question, I go on to
amplify the answer, and that’s what I’ll do here as well.
First, I ask the student who wants to employ first-person why they
chose that stance. Almost without exception, they’ll state, “Well, it’s just
more intimate. Third person is too formal for the character I want to create
for the story.”
That’s when I proceed to knock holes in that theory.
Before I do that, here are a few things I’ve observed. More
beginning writers than established writers tend to write in first-person. Far
more people who’ve been published are aware that third person is considered the
“professional” POV and that first-person is often considered the “amateur” POV.
Now, before everybody starts yelling at me that there are tons of
excellent books out there written in first-person, let me assure you I’m well
aware of that. If I may, I’d like to refer you back to my short answer:
“Whatever the material calls for.” There are often times when the material
calls for first person. However… not as often as is sometimes realized.
Let me explain.
The chief reason many agents and editors prefer third person and
call it the “professional” POV, is that the overwhelming percentage of
successful books and bestsellers are written in third person. This isn’t an
accident. There are reasons this is the case.
Actually, the overwhelming majority of manuscripts that arrive in
a publisher’s or agent’s office are written in first-person. If that’s so (and
it is), then why would more third-person efforts become published? Well,
because many more manuscripts are submitted by beginners than by pros. By the
time one goes from the beginner’s group to the published group, the numbers in
the second group have dramatically diminished. That means the second group is
going to be predominantly writing in third person. Fewer people by far in that
group, but a much higher percentage of publishable manuscripts. Most in third
person…
This simply goes back to my observation above that more beginning
writers employ first-person than do seasoned pros. Editors and agents have also
noted this fact. Overwhelmingly so do beginners prefer to write in first-
rather than third-person.
That means that when a gatekeeper encounters a first-person manuscript,
it goes without saying that a little red light goes on (from his/her past
experiences) that chances are pretty good this mss came from a… less seasoned
writer. And, it’s just a fact of life and the business of writing that the
newer the writer, the less likely the mss will be of publishable quality.
Does that mean when your first-person opus lands on an editor’s or
agent’s desk it is doomed from the start? Of
course not. But, a writer should be aware that there’s a bit of a bias already
in place against first-person.
If it’s a book that should have been written in first rather than
third, and it’s written well and is of publishable quality, no problem. Any
good editor or agent will be able to tell within a couple of pages if it’s
written well or not, no matter what POV stance the author has elected.
Why do agents and editors feel this way about first-person? This
gets to the heart of the matter. The reason many hold first-person in a
negative light is that anyone who’s read many manuscripts knows that a great
many first-person novels are thinly-disguised autobiographies, usually
espousing some recently-learned political or social philosophy, or, if not
that, their imitation of some current (or just-over) line of bestsellers. At
present, this includes vampire or zombie opuses, or invincible characters who
look suspiciously like Jack Reacher but have different names.
Another reason many choose a first-person narrator is that it
seems easier to
newer writers. Many (many!) first novels are written with characters saying and
thinking things the writer him- or herself thinks in their own minds. Novels
that are fiction in name only; primarily many are just vehicles to assign the
writer’s own thoughts to in a loosely-degenerative plot.
Those are all secondary reasons why some writers choose
first-person. Overwhelmingly, however, the biggest single reason lots of
writers choose first is that they feel it’s a more intimate POV. It
seems to make sense. After all, if one is writing “I” from their character’s
POV, one can’t get much closer to the character, can they?
You saw this coming, didn’t you!
Of course there’s a way to achieve the same intimacy with third
person as there is with first. And, it’s easy.
Simply by employing a close third
person, not a formal third. A narrative that uses a
close third achieves exactly the same intimacy with the reader as a first
person does. The good news is that by using a close third person you get all
the positives and none of the negatives of first person.
The bad news is… well, there isn’t any bad news. It’s a win-win
situation.
And, how does one achieve this magical close third that feels
like first person with none of the baggage of first?
Again, it’s easy. You simply substitute personal pronouns for
the character’s name. That’s it. Sounds too good to be true, doesn’t it?
Let’s take a look. Examples are the best way to prove a point.
I’ll give you a section of narrative in which a formal third is
used. Then, I’ll give the same passage in first person. And, finally, I’ll
follow that with the same narrative, only this time with personal pronouns in a
close third person. I feel confident that as soon as you read them you’ll see
and feel the difference.
***
From my short story, “My Idea of a Nice Thing” first published
in Breeze and
included in my short story collection, “Monday’s Meal.” (The two people are at
an A.A. meeting and it’s about a third through the story.)
First, the passage in a formal third person:
“My idea of a nice thing,” he said, “would be a world where you could get drunk
and it wouldn’t harm you, physically, anyway.”
Raye turned and offered her hand. “My name is Raye.”
“Hi, Raye. Emory. Like the board.”
Raye didn’t quite get it and first and then she did and smiled.
“I liked what you said that time, about sorting yourself out.”
Again, Raye didn’t get it at first, and then she realized he must have been at
the meeting she’d first gotten up and spoken at.
“Well, yeah,” Raye said, “It’s kind of like that, but boy did I get in trouble
saying that!”
“From Jim, right?” ‘You shouldn’t talk about the joys of drink at a meeting or
a place where that’s all the people think about?’ That Jim?” He grinned, and
Raye saw he had great teeth, even and white, and what was nice was the way he
smiled. Like he was unaware of how great his teeth really were, that he was
smiling just because he was happy or had thought of something funny. “There’s
been talk of replacing ol’ Jim. He gets his meetings mixed up, thinks this is
Parents Without Partners.”
There must have been something in Raye’s face that made him realize he’d said
the wrong thing.
“Look, I’m sorry. Let’s get out of here,” he said. “Go get a drink.”
They use the same pickup lines here that they do in bars, Raye thought.
“I don’t mean a drink with liquor in it,” he said. “I mean a Coke or something,
but in a bar. This place feels like a hospital. It’s depressing.”
“This is a
hospital… Emory,” Raye added his name haltingly, knowing that once she’d said
it she was going to leave with him.
That’s
a formal third. Now, read the same passage as first person.
“My idea of a nice thing,” he said, “would be a world where you could get drunk
and it wouldn’t harm you, physically, anyway.”
“Raye,” I said, turning and offering my hand. “My name is Raye.”
“Hi, Raye. Emory. Like the board.”
I didn’t quite get it at first and then I did and smiled.
“I liked what you said that time, about sorting yourself out.”
Again, I didn’t get it at first, and then I realized he must have been at the
meeting I’d first gotten up and spoken at.
“Well, yeah,” I said, “It’s kind of like that, but boy did I get in trouble
saying that!”
“From Jim, right?” ‘You shouldn’t talk about the joys of drink at a meeting or
a place where that’s all the people think about?’ That Jim?” He grinned, and I
saw he had great teeth, even and white, and what was nice was the way he
smiled. Like he was unaware of how great his teeth really were, that he was
smiling just because he was happy or had thought of something funny. “There’s
been talk of replacing ol’ Jim. He gets his meetings mixed up, thinks this is
Parents Without Partners.”
There must have been something in my face that made him realize he’d said the
wrong thing.
“Look, I’m sorry. Let’s get out of here,” he said. “Go get a drink.”
They use the same pickup lines here that they do in bars, I thought.
“I don’t mean a drink with liquor in it,” he said. “I mean a Coke or something,
but in a bar. This place feels like a hospital. It’s depressing.”
“This is a
hospital… Emory,” I added his name haltingly, knowing that once I’d said it I
was going to leave with him.
And,
finally, the same passage as a close third. See if you don’t agree it feels
exactly like first person.
“My idea of a nice thing,” he said, “would be a world where you could get drunk
and it wouldn’t harm you, physically, anyway.”
“Raye,” she said, turning and offering her hand. “My name is Raye.”
“Hi, Raye. Emory. Like the board.”
She didn’t quite get it and first and then she did and smiled.
“I liked what you said that time, about sorting yourself out.”
Again, she didn’t get it at first, and then she realized he must have been at
the meeting she’d first gotten up and spoken at.
“Well, yeah,” she said, “It’s kind of like that, but boy did I get in trouble
saying that!”
“From Jim, right?” ‘You shouldn’t talk about the joys of drink at a meeting or
a place where that’s all the people think about?’ That Jim?” He grinned, and
she saw he had great teeth, even and white, and what was nice was the way he
smiled. Like he was unaware of how great his teeth really were, that he was
smiling just because he was happy or had thought of something funny. “There’s
been talk of replacing ol’ Jim. He gets his meetings mixed up, thinks this is
Parents Without Partners.”
There must have been something in her face that made him realize he’d said the
wrong thing.
“Look, I’m sorry. Let’s get out of here,” he said. “Go get a drink.”
They use the same pickup lines here that they do in bars, she thought.
“I don’t mean a drink with liquor in it,” he said. “I mean a Coke or something,
but in a bar. This place feels like a hospital. It’s depressing.”
“This is a
hospital… Emory,” she added his name haltingly, knowing that once she’d said it
she was going to leave with him.
***
See how by simply replacing the POV character’s name with personal
pronouns instantly transforms it into a read that feels exactly like first
person. The same level of intimacy? Kinda neat, isn’t it!
How do you know when the “material calls for first or third
person?”
There’s a handy-dandy litmus test. If you can substitute personal
pronouns for all the “I’s” in the narrative and it doesn’t affect the story…
then it should be in third. If it does affect the story and in a negative way,
then it should be in first. Most of the time I think you’ll find that it works
better in third person. A close third
person.
Personally, I often write in first person. Mostly for short
stories. For novels, occasionally I’ll use first person, but mostly I opt for
third. A close third.
Try it yourself. Take a passage written in a formal third (where
the POV character’s name is used often) and rewrite it, taking out all the
instances where the name is used and substitute personal pronouns for the POV
character’s name. (This is once the character’s name is on the page and the
reader knows who the “he” or “she” is.) Then, recast it in first person and
compare the close third version with the first person version and see if you
don’t agree they feel pretty much the same.
Or, take a previously-written passage in first person and
substitute personal pronouns for the I’s. If you don’t feel any or very much
difference, guess what? It might be a better POV to use.
Hope this helps!
Blue skies,
Les
Les
* * *
* * *
ABOUT
LES
Les
Edgerton is an ex-con, matriculating at Pendleton Reformatory in the sixties
for burglary. He was an outlaw for many years and was involved in shootouts,
knifings, robberies, high-speed car chases, drugs, was a pimp, worked for an
escort service, starred in porn movies, was a gambler, served four years in the
Navy, and had other misadventures. He’s since taken a vow of poverty (became a
writer) with 18 books in print, including Finding Your Voice and HOOKED.
Three of his novels have been sold to German publisher, Pulpmaster
for the German language rights. His memoir, Adrenaline Junkie is currently being
marketed. Work
of his has been nominated for or won: the Pushcart Prize, O. Henry Award, Edgar
Allan Poe Award (short story category), Derringer Award, PEN/Faulkner Award,
Jesse Jones Book Award, Spinetingler Magazine Award for Best Novel (Legends
category), and the Violet Crown Book Award, among others.
Les holds a B.A. from I.U. and the MFA in Writing from Vermont
College. He was the writer-in-residence for three years at the University of
Toledo, for one year at Trine University, and taught writing classes for UCLA,
St. Francis University, Phoenix College, Writer’s Digest, Vermont
College, the New York Writer’s Workshop and other places. He currently teaches
a private novel-writing class online.
He can be found at www.lesedgertononwriting.blogspot.com/.
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19 COMMENTS TO USING THIRD PERSON VS FIRST PERSON NOVEL
NARRATIVES
Love
close (I call it deep) pov. I did have one character who demanded first, but
otherwise, I’m Deep 3rd all the way. Doesn’t mean you can’t have more than one
POV character in the book, but I prefer reading 3rd. (And don’t get me started
on present tense… ugh.)
I prefer reading third person all the way. It’s got to be a
super-likeable funny main character to keep me engaged in first person. And I
find present tense so distracting. I have a really hard time reading it,
although I have seen it used well in some short stories.
Thank
you for this clear, well thought out defense of third person, Les. Had a hard
time getting past the ‘less than’ of 1st, but I get what you’re saying.
One
more reason to use third (deep third) – I’m writing a 3 book series. The voice
that came to me in the first story was first person, so I wrote it that way.
The second story should be third – but my editor told me I’d have to stick with
1st the whole 3 books.
Or, I
could rewrite the first in third.
Um, no
thanks.
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Mary Bailey
Mary Bailey
Dear
Les,
I read
your article with great interest. You are very good at what you do! I am
writing a novel in omniscient 3rd POV. Is that the same as close third person?
Mary
I have
until tomorrow to submit 50 pages for a workshop in April and I’ve been writing
in third person for the first time (my debut novel is in 1st- yup, just like
you said above-first time author and all that). Readers have been saying the
new story seems too distant. Went through and changed those “names” to the
personal pronouns and voila! all the difference. Thanks, Les. Couldn’t have
come at a better time. I know there’s a bit more to it (like observations that
this character would make in a particular scene that only she would be attuned
to to make it seem more “close”) but your quick fix gets me most of the way
there,
Though
I have to consider myself a beginner, third person is my preference – partly
because most of what I personally read is in third, but mostly because I like
stories with multiple plot threads. Sharing other character’s POVs to advance
their threads. I’m sure you’ll receive much push-back on first person being a
tendency for beginners. Also, I’m not so sure the third-person bias you mention
is still so true, given the explosion of first person series we are witnessing.
Publishers, I’m sure, are still looking for what is popular.
I
sincerely wish I could edit my posts here to clean up errors. Oh well.
I use
third person where I need multiple POV characters. First person if I only need
one POV character
Hi Les!
(I just started reading HOOKED–you can’t ignore that many recommendations, but
first time I’ve seen you blog). THANKS for addressing the subject. First as a
reader I’m feeling vindicated because I really can’t stand READING books in the
first-person. Never quite sure why. Maybe ’cause the MC can’t say anything
positive about herself without being stuck up, or point out her own flaws
without sounding falsely self-deprecatory–heck, the minute they start to talk
about themselves at all, it’s ruined for me.
So. I
think I write a close 3rd in the heart of scenes–with dialogues, interactions.
But surely there’s more to it than replacing pronouns? I pick a POV and mostly
stick with it for the scene, using italics for their thoughts if needed. I
spend a little more time getting in their heads. I’m not Hemingway.
Having
said that, Mary had a good question. My “narrator” is at other times more of an
omniscient one; I have a definite voice (I’m told, hoping that’s a good thing).
If I juxtapose two seemingly unrelated sentences for effect, giving the reader
a potential “ah-ha” moment, isn’t that the work of an omnisicent narrator? Or
dropping bits of back-story, world-building–there isn’t always a character to
attribute those thoughts to.
I
really don’t know if I’m conflating omniscient and close 3rds in a way that
could be disastrous. It feels natural but the POV-police could give me a ticket
if they caught me.
Very
interesting. I hadn’t know there was a bias against first person. As it is, I
write almost always in deep 3rd. Where I struggle with using only pronouns for
the pov character is when there are conversations between two males or two
females. Sometimes I find I have to use the POV character’s name instead of the
pronoun for clarity. In your example, if Raye had been male, how would you have
handled it? Would you simply have used Emory’s name instead of he in every
instance, and said “the man” for the first “he’ when Ray doesn’t know his name?
It sounds a bit stilted that way, especially in the long paragraph.
very
interesting article. thanks so much for the info Les. shame you have the same
typo repeated three times in the examples
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lesedgerton
lesedgerton
Sorry I
can’t reply right now but came down with a severe case of the flu two days
ago–as soon as I’m up to it I’ll address the issues–thanks for your patience!
Blue skies, Les
This flu is so dreadful! I’m sorry you have it, Les. I had it and
it kept me down for five days solid, even with Tamiflu. Feel better soon!!!
No flu
for me, Butch. Sorry you got it. Of course, I rarely leave the house. I’m
intrigued with writing in present tense. In fact, I rewrote a piece that was
past tense. What do you think about that? At first I thought the change would
be difficult, but after a short time, I fell right into it.
Cheers!
And Happy B-Day, again!
Jim in Mt
Jim in Mt
I’d
never heard this explained in quite this way before. Thanks!
·
Fae Rowen
Fae Rowen
When I
use deep POV I can get more emotion into my writing because I’m in my
character’s head. For me, it’s much more than just a change of pronouns; it’s
sharing the inner thoughts and fears of the character with my readers. Although
none of my five books are written in first person, young adult books are
generally written (and bought by editors) in first person.
Is
there a general rule for work that is intentionally autobiographical?
[…]
Every story has large, overarching elements writers have to deal with. Daeus
Lamb gives us theme made easy, and Les Edgerton unpacks using 3rd person vs.
1st person novel narratives. […]
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